Summary: Durzo musing about how he came to care about Kylar. Not Slash
This is set just before chapter 23 of The Way of the Shadows.
I hope my characterization of Durzo is believable and my English not too bad. I'd love to hear suggestions as to how I could improve this. =)
Musing
Erstellt: 25.11.2011
Letzte Änderung: 25.11.2011
Letzte Änderung: 25.11.2011
abgeschlossen
Englisch
511 Wörter, 1 Kapitel
511 Wörter, 1 Kapitel
Hauptcharaktere: Durzo Blint / Kylar Stern
Kapitel | Datum | Andere Formate | Daten |
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Kapitel 1 Kapitel 1 | E: 25.11.2011 U: 25.11.2011 |
Kommentare (2) 511 Wörter abgeschlossen |
Awesome, just awesome! I always loved to read the Night Angel Trilogy and now I'm really happy to have found a fanfiction about this topic!
This one was written in a realistic way, that's exactly how Durzo could have thought about Azoth/Kylar, even though it's - at least from my point of view - a little confusing to see him talking about his Ka'kari so freely. A secret like this might usually be more... hidden, I don't know...
From what I've seen, there weren't mistakes (erm, I'm not that good at english at all, so this doesn't have to say much, haha), but it was written in a way that a person who doesn't speak english that fluently can read it without problems.
I liked it a lot! I'm looking forward to read some more amazing stories of you!
Ryucama
This one was written in a realistic way, that's exactly how Durzo could have thought about Azoth/Kylar, even though it's - at least from my point of view - a little confusing to see him talking about his Ka'kari so freely. A secret like this might usually be more... hidden, I don't know...
From what I've seen, there weren't mistakes (erm, I'm not that good at english at all, so this doesn't have to say much, haha), but it was written in a way that a person who doesn't speak english that fluently can read it without problems.
I liked it a lot! I'm looking forward to read some more amazing stories of you!
Ryucama
Kommentar zu: Kapitel 1:
Hello :)
As promised, here's my comment. It's great that someone writes fanfiction about the Night Angel trilogy, I never expected to find anyone on animexx who knew it.
Your story is really good, I like Durzo's musings, I think you captured his character really well. It makes sense for him to think these things and you did a good job in writing them!
Your english is very good aswell, I didn't spot any grave mistakes. I think your commas are not all correct, but then again commas in english are very difficult, so I wouldn't be concerned about that.
All in all, I really liked the story, it was very in-character.
Sorry my comment isn't longer, but then your story isn't really aswell ;)
All the best,
Fee
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As promised, here's my comment. It's great that someone writes fanfiction about the Night Angel trilogy, I never expected to find anyone on animexx who knew it.
Your story is really good, I like Durzo's musings, I think you captured his character really well. It makes sense for him to think these things and you did a good job in writing them!
Your english is very good aswell, I didn't spot any grave mistakes. I think your commas are not all correct, but then again commas in english are very difficult, so I wouldn't be concerned about that.
All in all, I really liked the story, it was very in-character.
Sorry my comment isn't longer, but then your story isn't really aswell ;)
All the best,
Fee
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Kommentar zu: Kapitel 1: